Topic: The Spongebob Squarepants Movbie(my Version)

[OrangeJellyfish]

Costguard
12:00 AM
Midnight
in a submarine underwater!

Lituenent:What have you found soildier
Soildier:Well I just found a...holly mother of god
a talking sponge with legs and arms,a talking starfish,
tons of human like sea creatures,a squirrel,a squid,a
krab,a couple of undersea burgers,a whale,and a
orangejellyfish!

Captain:Holly god put it on selth scope!

They saw Spongebob,Patrick,Mr.Krabs,Pearl,Squidward,Sandy Cheeks,
and Tangerine sleeping in Sandy`s bubble home,they then were hit by a
rock and sunk underwater.The next morning the whole town saw the humans and said"Look
weird looking creatures from land!"a purple fish said.The whole town brought the humans towards a air thing and what better place than Sandy`s bubble home.

Lietuenent:I want all these sea creatures sold on land and then distributed to the goverment for further analysis

The sea creatures ran,but the men caught all of them except Mr.Krabs,sandy,spongebob,patrick,gary,tangerine,pearl,and plankton.The sea creatures went ahead to catch the humans,then the sea creatures cvalled in Merdmaid Man & Barnacle Boy and all of them attacked the humans sending them towards land and erasing their memories!            

THE END

[Patrick]

My Review:
Why did you write half of it in script form and half in normal? Also, that was way to short for even a chapter of a fanfic. The story was not good too.

4/10.

[Jashani]

My Review:
Patrick is right that is wayyyyy to short! Wheres the details...whats the point in all this all I understand is everyone in Bikini Bottom getting caught by humens...Why where they all sleeping in Sandy's Dome? Sorry this story doesn't make a lot of sense. IM not being mean and all but if this were to be the real plot of the movie I woulden't watch it.

I give it 2 stars **  

[chuchino55]

Who's Tangerine? last time i checked, there's no SB character called Tangerine. Plus, that would be a very short movie/movbie.

[Spider-Boogie]

My review:
1. Way too short.
2. Who is Tangerine?
3. Mixing drawings (SB) and real time (lieutenant and soldier) isn't good.
My score: 1 star * out of 5.

[Doom 2 Marine]

Well if you set it out right it would be good and tangerine is the orange jelly fish i think



If i wrote a movie script it would have portions of the superpants 2 story


2-5

[Gassy583]

I give it
*+/**** stars.[/size][/font]

[djwit_atie]

uhhhhhh........ NO comment
i give it * one star[/size]

[super_sayian_spongebob]

My Review:


1.WTF? Who's Tangerine?
2.Also it was wayyyyy too short for a feature film.
3. Why would the humans capture sea creatures? They're needs to be some certain plot behind the bad guys before it can start.
4. It's mainly MermaidMan&BarnicleBoy who's saving the town and fish. Why not SpongeBob, he's the main chracter.

Overall Grade: D-
Stars: *

 

[spongehead91]

ill give that
1/1000

that was realy terible

 

[Patrick]

Okay, Doom 2 Marine, spongehead91, djwit_atie and gassy (who is MSP who is banned). Don't just say "it sucks".

Give ideas on how to improve it or whatever.

BAD: THAT SUCKED SO MUCH! ONE STAR!
Good: Read anyones post but Doom 2 Marine, spongehead91, djwit_atie and gassy.

[Rabble]

2.6/20
you should make it longer
 

[SpongeBrain]

1. Longer
2. More funny
3. Better layout

I'd give it a 60%If it's your first FanFiction, but if it isn't 40%.