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SpongeBob SquarePants => Easter Island Head => Topic started by: patrick12q on July 14, 2005, 02:55:33 pm
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CHAPTER 1-the begining
it was the begining of time, and planets have been created, but we'll start here, on the planet irk, 2 giant irkens awoke...
red:hey?we're alive!
purple:why?were we dead?
red:no you idiot!it's the begining of time!
puple:how do you know that?
red:uhhh, i don't know!
puple:hmm...it's kind of lonely here...
red:so?we've got snacks!(they look, there's a feild of snacks)
purple:cool!(they go out and start eating snacks)
purple:hey!look!cheese booger seeds!
red:eh, i think we should buid civilization!
purple:eh, you go ahead!
red(angry):eerrrr!fine!if we ever get alien/robot slaves, i'll be the one most remembered!
purple(planting the seeds):whatever!
red(shows red building something, later, he goes up to red, he's covered with oil and looks tired)well, i got the robot slave thing worked out, they're now building civilization.
robot:here's a throne, my leaders!
red:leaders?(looks at purple)
purple:i kinda snuck in and made them command you and me!sorry!
red:you fat, stupid idiot!
puple:HEY!I AIN'T FAT!and whats the matter?how does making the robots obey both of us make me an idiot?
red:EERRRRR!I DON'T WANT TO SEE YOU, OR TALK TO YOU AGAIN!SO LET ME SETTLE SOMETHING!(shows red where the city is, and shows purple in a open area)that's your half of the planet, that mine!
purple:but...
red:no BUTTS!GO!FROM NOW ON, I DON'T WANT TO SEE YOU AGAIN! :angry:
purple(slowly walks away, sadly):well, bye(contiues walking)
red:at least i won't see him again!he was starting to get on my nerves
purple:i wish i didn't anger him, well, i hope he changes his mind, i hope he does.
4 YEARS LATER
purple:it's getting lonely HERE!AND I'M LOST!RED?RED?!RED?!
(cuts to red)
red:now!we shall rule the universe!
robots yeah!yeah!yeah!
purple(falls out of bush):ow!woa!i must've went all the way around the planet!
red:get him!he's a traitor!
purple:wha-?noooo!no!no!nnnnnnnooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Good story but Red & Purple aren't the only tallest Myuki is one of them you can find more info on the episode script called "The Trial"at "The Scary Monkey Show.com".
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oh, i didn't know that, oh well.maybe i'll put him later in the story, where they find him.er, was he the first tallest?
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No there were a ton more.
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ok, so, they'll find this land where they find all the tallest, so i got that one figured out.
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CHAPTER 2-the battle
robots:fire!(they start shooting at purple)
purple:aaaaahhhhhh!!!!!!!(dodges a few shots)haha!this is-(gets shot in the hand)ow!(falls)
red:muhahahahahahahahaaa!
purple:you've gone mad!(robots close in on him, he see's a lazer, he grabs it)
red:uh-oh
purple(starts blasting at robots, one grabs him):errr...(shoots the robot, he goes around blasting at all the robots, but 2 paralyze him.)er, can't move!
red:take him to the prison
purple:it's me! pu-(get's zapped)aaahhhhhhhh!!!!!!(shows him in prison)er, hey, wait a minute, i can blast this door open!(blasts it)haha, suckers!(robots look at him)
robot:must destroy enemy!
purple:uh-oh(runs, the robots chase him)aahhhh!(the robots start blasting at him,a few shots hit him)ow!ow!ouchies, ow!ooh, ow!(some lazers come out of the wall and start shooting him, alarms go off)uh-oh!oh, wait(shoots some robots, gets hit in the back)ahhhhhh!!!!!!!(runs out of prison, the robots get hit by lazers)phew!(runs out and meets red)hi, red!
red:you escapesd!?then i guess i'll just have to deal with you, myself.
purple:it's me!purple!
red:purple?er,(jumps on him) i told you to get out of here
purple:yeah, but, hill!
red:wha-(they roll down a hill)
red and purple:ow!ow!ouchies!wo!ow!oe!oi!oof!aaaaahhhhhhh!!!(they roll into some bushes)what the?(looks around)
voice:welcome, tallest...
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Great job. 100/10
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CHAPTER 3-the land of the tallest
red:who are you?
tallest:we are the tallest.
purple:what are tallest?
tallest:what you are.you are tallest.we are also tallest
red:wow, this sure beats the heck out of my city.
purple:yeah it does.
red:shut up, hey.do you have any food around here?
purple:yeah, i'm starved
tallest:sure.
(after eating, it's night, the tallest walk out with they're stomachs full)
red:boy, i can barely walk.
purple:Me neither.(bushes move)hey, what was that?
red:haven't you ever heard of wind?
purple:oh, your right.
(suddenly, 3 figures come out of the bushes)
red:aaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!what is that?(more figures come out of the bushes, the tallest are suddenly surrounded by what looks like smaller versions of themselves)
red and purple:aaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
TO BE CONTINUED...
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Great job! 10000/10
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It's perfectly okay, but this is contrast to what I say.
[spoiler]You did well, but just a comment: Perfect your grammar skills.[/spoiler]
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wow.haven't done this fanfic in a while.so:
CHAPTER 4-citizons.
red:who are you!(the figures start bowing)
irks:we obey tallest!
red:hey!check it out!we have slaves!
tallest:i believe you found our citizens!!!!
red:but we didn't find them, THEY found us!
irken:you guys planted us from the seed!
purple:seed?ohhhhhh, i thought they were hamburger seeds.what should we call our alien species?
tallest:we already called ourselves, the irkens.
red:cool.what about the plan-
tallest:irk.
purple:cool!
tallest:now, let's celebrate this founding!(later shows them all dancing.)
red:wow!these tallest sure know how to throw a party!
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Good job. 10/10
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9/10
The Tallest job is passed tothe second tallest Irken when either the current tallest dies or he is out grown,Zim killed the 2 tallest before Red & Purple.
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the chapters are abit short...and some of the characters are pretty much out of character.
Also, spelling and grammar needs to be worked on.
Other than that...
5/10
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I agree with Srah. But I give you 6/10.