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SpongeBob SquarePants => Easter Island Head => Topic started by: .com person on August 14, 2004, 10:37:35 pm
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Hi, I'm doing a Spongebob fanfic. ( cheers) I've been doing anime fanfics alot lately but this time decided to make a cartoon one, so here goes. I don't watch it ( as in Spongebob) much but hope to improve that in the future. :biggrin: ( written in script format) The rockbottom is one of the best episodes, in my oppion, I have seen so hmm guess what happens... Read on.....
Chapter 1:
Narrator: Ahh in Bikini Bottom, everything is normal except...
Mr Krab: Money, Money, Money ( you know how Krabs acts when he thinks of Money, actually various ways but they are all connected)
Narrator: Never mind.
Narrator: Let's visit Spongebob and see what he's up to
Spongebob: Gary, guess what I'm going for my license ( all excited)
Gary: Meow ( again)
Spongebob: Know Gary, I know I've failed so many times but it's time to not give up
Gary: Meow ( you never did)
Spongebob: You are right Gary
Spongebob: Well I'm out, see you later Gary ( goes out of door). I'm ready ( ... you know the catchy ready drill)
Patrick: Spongebob
Spongebob: ( looks behind him)
Patrick: Help me!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Spongebob: What!!!!!!!!!!
Oh and cliffhanger here, big one ( don't expect me to finish this right away)
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Simple beginnings can sometimes hype me for the future. 7/10.
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6.7 of 10
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8-10 i say
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7/10
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I hate you guys, you guys insult me :angry:
Just kidding!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chapter 2:
Patrick: ( in the bus waving his hands up and down) They got me, they captured me ( car zooming 80 miles an hour)
Spongebob: ( starts freaking out) I'll save you, I hope ( starts running after bus)
Patrick: Hurry Spongebob, Hurry ( screams and yells)
( Bus shoots missles hitting spongebob)
( Bus dissapears)
Spongebob: Where did the bus go, hmm, I know where I should go
Knocks on Squidwirds door
Squidwird: ( answers)
Squidwird: Spongebob ( angry) what are you pestering me for?
Spongebob: We got to save Patrick, Squidwird!!!!!!!
Squidwird: Out!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Spongebob: But squidwird
Squidwird: But nothing Spongebob
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Pretty good.
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I thought that the second chapter was a lot better then the first, but still good!
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Chapter 3:
Spongebob: Squidwird but we have to save Patrick ( Spongebob demanded)
Squidwird: How about I say this " NO!!!!!!!!!!!!!"
( Squidwird kicks Spongebob out)
Spongebob: Dang, why is he so angry ( confused and sad)
Spongebob: ( in determined mode) No matter, I'll save Patrick
Sandy: Hi Spongebob ( walks up to SB)
Spongebob: Sandy, something terrible happened to Patrick
Sandy: He didn't cut his finger preparing that gross chesse, did he ( looking angry)
Spongebob: No, Sandy he was kidnapped
Sandy: Say what ( worried)
Spongebob: Kid Napped
Sandy: Oh my ... we have to save him
Spongebob: But Sandy, I totally lost him and its been hours
Sandy: Hours??????
Spongebob: Ya, I was blinded by shooting missles and then I woke up
Sandy: Where were you when you were blinded ( looking confused)
Spongebob: Out in the middle of the road
Sandy: No body hit you ( with a perked up confused eyebrow)
Spongebob: No
Sandy: This sounds just like the earlier incident in the news
Spongebob: What incident
Sandy: In the news this morning is that every 5 days somebody is kidnapped and taken far away but when people go after the bus they are knocked out for what seems like hours but its accidently mind tricking games and whats worse
Spongebob: Oh no ( freaking out)
Sandy: the kiddnapper is out to kill
Spongebob: ( screams)
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I won't post more till you guys tell me what you think.
opps I'm sorry for the doubule post
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GREAT! i want to know what happens. it's great and suspenseful
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Wow, I thought this topic was going to be dead forever, no offense. :blink:
I'll get right to it.
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i can't wait
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new chapter!i love it now
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Chapter 4:
* At rock bottom*
" Take him to the cell", one demanded.
" Is a cell like an icecream cone" ( I'm sorry but its hard to portray Patrick, no offense), said Patrick.
" Ya without the pudding", one said.
" I love Pudding!!!!!!!!!", said Patrick.
" Then you'll love the cell", the guy in the jail said.
" Oh goody!!!!!!!!!!!!!!", said Patrick.
* At Squidwird's place *
* kisses clarinet*
" I dedicate this romantic piece to you, my sweetheart", said Squidwird.
Starts to play clarinet comes out sounding pretty stupid.
* breaks clarinet*
" I give up!!!!!", he yelled.
* At the Krusty Krabs*
Spongebob comes racing in.
" Mr Krabs!!!!!!", said Spongebob panicking.
He went into Mr. Krabs office.
Mr Krabs was counting his money. ( what a surprise)
" Spongebob, you don't need to come early today to take care of the patty vault", said Mr. Krabs.
Comments?
A rating?
Anything even if its a flame so I can improve.
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that chapter was too short but it still hanging with a 9/10
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I might finish this even though I'm not an SB fan anymore
9/10??? Really???? You guys can give me such good ratings!!!
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NEXT CHAPTER?????
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yes next chapter coming soon
keyword: soon
keep your patience
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i'm trying to keep my patience, but it seems like everybody who is making a fanfic is taking a break.
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Who cares, there is lots of other stuff to do on this forum!
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ya, i know, but all the fanfics are good. And I want to find out what happens.
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Yah, I know, but all the fanfics are good. And I want to find out what happens.
Same here.
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Chapter 5:
" Spongebob, you don't need to come early today to take care of the patty vault", said Mr. Krabs.
" Mr. Krabs come quick it's Patrick hes been kidnapped", said Spongebob.
" So he doesn't bring in me money", said Mr. Krabs.
" Mr. Krabs, I'm dissapointed in you", said Spongebob.
" Okay, Okay", said Mr. Krabs.
" I just got to put me money away then we'll search", said Mr. Krabs.
" Thank you Mr. Krabs your a real friend", said Spongebob.
" Don't put to much air in ye hand know there lad", said Mr. Krabs.
Squidwird came in and put his hat down.
" Mr Krabs, I quit", said Squidwird.
" What", said Mr. Krabs outradged.
" But Squidwird", said Spongebob.
Time for a break LOL
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short, and getting worse, but i'd still like to know what happens. is there going to be another part?
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short, and getting worse, but i'd still like to know what happens. is there going to be another part?
No, I think I'll quit
afterall its getting worse :blink: