I was board one day so i started to make a beginning to a story, can u help me corect it and help me think of ideas so i can finish my story?, oh and feal free to critasize cause like i dothat all the time with your work:O so like speek your mind (type),and in the storyim a candy freek
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“One more” Laurence told the cashier, “ok that’s a total of fifteen dollars and 10 cents” Laurence handed a 20-dollar bill to the cashier and got his change, “will that be all?” asked the cashier, “yup, thanks”. Laurence headed outside to his friends who where waiting for him, “what did you get?” asked Nick, “pixie sticks” replied Laurence. “Whoa there’s a lot in here!” “I better be getting home, I told my dad I would be home before four-thirty” Miriam explained “me too” said Rebecca. Laurence handed Miriam and Rebecca some pixie sticks and they headed for the bust stop on Wellington. “I’m board” said Alex, “lets go to my house and watch a movie or something, and we can eat pixie sticks, Wahoo!” Yelled Laurence. “Sure” nick said, “You in Alex?” “Meh I’ve got nothing better to-do anyways ok”. The friends traveled on the city bus; # 95, and got off on Iris street and walked to Laurence’s house. “ Yum something smells good” nick said happily, “that’s probably my mom cooking din din, we are having spaghetti”, the three friends went into the basement and tried to pick out a movie to watch. “What about Rush hour 2?” “Nah we have all seen that like a billion times “What about rat race?” said Alex, “what about watching one of my home movies, staring me!” said Laurence. “sure why not “ said Alex and Nick. Laurence put a tape into the beta machine and pushed play. The tape was about Laurence’s camping trip to 1000 Islands, they where roasting marshmallows on an open fire when “BOOM!” the power got knocked out . “what happened?” asked Laurence, “The power got knocked out, duh” explained Alex. The three ran up stairs and grabbed candles and a BBQ lighter, “I wonder what knocked out the power, I hope it wasn’t like last year when the power got knocked out for about 2 weeks and all I did all day was listen to the radio!”
