Topic: Chapter 1: Quest For Golden Coconut

[spongeyness525]

My first fanfic so its not exactly perfect

Tell me what you think of it :biggrin:
PS if its in bold, its what someones doing or how someone's saying something

Narrator: cheerfully Ahhhh…what do we have here? Spongebob and Patrick playing secret agent in Spongebob’s living room? What idiots!
Spongebob: talking in walkie talkie behind couch Code 2, this is code 1 do you read me?
Patrick: Talking in walkie talkie behind TV I read you loud and clear Spongebob—uh—I mean Code 1.
Gary slithers into the living room
Gary: Meow
Spongebob: Do you see our arch nemesis?
Patrick: Yes. I’m gonna shoot him with my laser!
Patrick sprays Gary with a small water gun
Patrick: YAY! WHOO-HOO!! I GOT HIM!!
 Patrick Puts Gary and his head and dances stupidly
Spongebob’s Mermaid Man and Barnacle Boy watch beeps
Spongebob: Patrick it’s 3:12!!! Do you know what that means?
Patrick: Ice-cream?
Spongebob: No Pat, MAIL!
Spongebob and Patrick: YAY!!!!!!
Spongebob and Patrick run outside to the mailbox
Spongebob looks inside it
Spongebob: Gary…Gary…Gary…hey it’s my PAYCHECK from the Krusty Krab!!!!!
Patrick: OPEN IT! OPEN IT! OPEN IT!
Spongebob rips it open and looks at the check.
Spongebob: WOW! I got $3.41!!!!! That’s 4 cents more than last time
Spongebob: Hey what’s this? Looks at a magazine he got in the back of his mailbox Challenger Magazine “The mag that shows you cool contests”
Patrick: Hey Spongebob, I think the magazine is a mag that shows you cool contests
Spongebob: Patrick, I just read that—Oh, never mind.
Spongebob: looks through the pages and something catches his eyes Wow Pat, look at this!

“The Quest for the Golden Coconut”
Call 1-800-678-1223 to sign up to try and find it.
Rules: 1. Call number 1-800-678-1223 and ask for Golden Coconut Quest. Give your name and address and your friend’s name and address.
2. On June 24, we’ll write to the 2 contest winners and they will be aloud to invite a friend/relative.
3. On June 24 the 2 contestants and their friend will be picked up in a limo with Marty Lotsobux and he will tell the winners about the game.

Patrick: Come on Spongebob! Let’s call.
Spongebob: But Patrick, there are 3.7 trillion fish in the sea!! There’s the smallest chance we will win.
Patrick: Yeah, but someone out of all those people will have to win. C’mon Spongebob!!!!!!!
Spongebob: Okay fine.
Spongebob and Patrick went back in Spongebob’s house and Spongebob reached for the shellphone and called the number
Spongebob: Hello I’m calling for the Golden Coconut Quest…Spongebob Squarepants, 124 Conch St. Bikini Bottom…Patrick Star, 122 Conch St. Bikini Bottom…Okay bye
Spongebob: Patrick, meet me outside of my mailbox tomorrow at 3:12
TOMORROW AT 3:12
Patrick and Spongebob walked to Spongebob’s mailbox.
Patrick: Let’s do it
Spongebob: gulpSpongebob opened it up and…

I know it was a REALLY short chapter but the next one’ll be longer. I’ll probably write the second one towards the end of the month cuz I’m going to camp for two weeks.
 

[Patrick]

ok... no offense, it was pretty good, but it wasnt that funny

[SS4Gohan]

wow great fanfic... it lacks humor a little, but still, you got the character's personalites down and it's very interseting... keep it up

-SS4Gohan

[cmonkey]

Thats pretty cool  :cool:  I'm looking forward to seeing chapter 2.

[ShAdOw]

Its not that bad, i liked it.  Best fanfic i've seen yet.

[spongeyness525]

i won't be able to write my second chapter bkuz 2 weeks of camp bishopswood in Hope, ME I'm leaving tomorrow (the 6th)

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[garyfan]

it waz pretty cool but not funny.....and thats what sb needs

[SS4Gohan]

yeah I agree

-SS4Gohan

[Super Ry]

It's cool, so.........WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO PUT UP THE NEXT CHAPTER???

[melly005]

that was really good, especially since it was ur first fanfic....... the character's personalities are down but it needs a little humor, but i'm excited 4 chapter 2 and also for more fanfics from u lata.  :happy:   :biggrin:   :original:  :original:

[spongeyness525]

next chappie will be up tomorrow @ noon (a ton of editing and adding) be here to read it (i would post it b4 but i'm busy all morning with crap :dry:  

[SS4Gohan]

Oh okay... I can't wait... I think

-SS4Gohan

[spongeyness525]

Chapter 2
Spongebob opened the letter and Spongebob read it out loud.

Spongebob: Dear, Spongebob and Patrick, CONGRATULATIONS! You have been selected Team #1 of the Golden Coconut Quest. A limousine will be here to pick you up at 4:00 to pick you up. Please bring whatever you will need.
            Sincerely,
               Joseph Lottamoney
               (Head of the Golden Coconut Quest)

Spongebob+Patrick: YAYEE!!! *Patrick and Spongebob prace, and hop, and jump, and fall, and fall again* :biggrin:

Spongebob: Let’s go tell Sandy

Patrick: Okay

*Spongebob and Patrick got their water helmets and ran to Sandy’s treedome*

Sandy: Wel’ howdy Spongebob and Patrick

Spongebob: Hi Sandy! Guess what.? We both won a contest called: Quest for the Golden Coconut. Sounds very adventurous dangerous , eh??

Sandy: I reckon. If you two critters are goin’ to do adventurous and dangerous stuff, you’ll need some gear. Follow me.

Sandy led them into her tree down a LOOOOOOOOONG hallway. The 3 of them passed what seemed like millions of rooms! It was like the never ending hallway. After 30 minutes, when Spongebob and Patrick were almost to drop…

Sandy: Here it is

It was a room with walls and walls with TONS of gadgets.

Sandy: Welcome to my gadget room.

Spongebob: Why would you have a room with millions of high-tech gadgets.

Sandy: Because life is cruel

Spongebob: um…yea….sure

Sandy: Well anyways, I just need to give you two something.

Sandy gave them both brown belts.

Patrick: Wow! A hat!

Sandy: No Pat, it’s a belt! This belt holds some very cool high-tech stuff like a mini staff that turns things the ice and fire, contact lenses that have x-ray and night vision, and mini radios that you put on your tooth and talk to eachother. Oh and Patrick, please don’t eat it.

Patrick: I’ll try not to

*Spongebob’s Mermaid Man and Barnacle Boy watch beeped. The watch read 3:59*

Spongebob: Holy Shrimp! Gotta go Sandy. Thanks for the high-tech gear. Bye

Sandy: See ya’ll, bye

Okay, tell me what you think of it!!!!!!!!!!!
 

[spongeyness525]

ps. sorry it was SO short

[DHoffryn]

really good I liked it!!!
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[SS4Gohan]

I guess it was good... it was better than your first one... maybe

-SS4Gohan

[Super Ry]

Would you get the next chapter already?