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« on: December 04, 2003, 01:23:24 pm »
The Gary Mystery
                                                                  Ch.1
                                                              The Intro
One Day:
Spongebob: Were's  Gary???!!!
Patrick: Hi spongebob!
Spongebob: I can't find Gary!
Patrick: Realy?
Spongebob: Did you HEAR what I said before?
Patrick: What?
Spongebob: Oh never mind! I beter go find him!
Patrick: Oooh Oooh!!! Can I come?
Spongebob: Well Ok.
Patrick: So. I guess we should bring some stuff.
Spongebob: Like What?
Patrick: Machete Knives!
Spongebob: Um? Maybe not. Maybe we should bring a few Krabby Patties and water bottles.
Patrick: Well I guess.
Spongebob: Great! Lets go!
::Door Shuts::
::Spongebob looks at a map::
Spongebob: Next Stop: Jelly Fish Fields!



 How do ya like it so far?
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« Reply #1 on: December 04, 2003, 01:52:05 pm »
It's okay. It's not really funny, and it's really short.
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« Reply #2 on: December 04, 2003, 03:35:06 pm »
well its supost to be short. its the " pilot " chapter just to see what people think.
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« Reply #3 on: December 04, 2003, 03:42:09 pm »
You have to make it long so people know what to say...
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« Reply #4 on: December 04, 2003, 03:43:55 pm »
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You have to make it long so people know what to say...
ill try to do that with the next chapter.
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« Reply #5 on: December 05, 2003, 01:10:10 pm »
Umm, it's ok, it's not really  that funny... But it is very Spongebob-and-Patrick-like.  :happy:  
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« Reply #6 on: December 05, 2003, 04:49:49 pm »
Ok, I tried to make it longer!


Chapter 2
Through the Jelly Fish Fields

Sponge: I guess we are here!
Pat: Oh Boy! I hope we catch lots of Jelly Fish!
Sponge: We don't have time for that now!
Pat: Oh Man! Why?
Sponge: Remember? Gary!
Pat: Oh yah!
Sponge: Hey. Look it's Kevin!
::Walks over to Kevin::
Sponge: Hi Kev'! What's up!
Kevin: Spongebob? I remember you! You stole my title as the leader of the Jelly      Spotters!
Sponge: Oh. I did?
Kevin: Yep!
Sponge: But I didn't join!
Kevin: They thought if you were better than me at jelly fishing than there must be lots of people better than me!
Sponge: Why?
Kevin: Because you're  a ::cough::Nerd!::cough::!
Sponge: Really?
Kevin: Your wearing 5 pairs of underwear right now!
Sponge: Hey! How can you tell?
Kevin: They are pulled up very high over your pants!
Pat: Who cares it's a thing of the past!
Kevin: I'll show you the past! ::starts acting crazy:: I lost my job, my friends, my house, my wife!
 Sponge: Umuh? we better leave!
Pat: Yah?
:: start running away::
Kevin: You will see! You will see!
Sponge: Better look in those caves!
Pat: I concur!
Sponge: Hey look! A note!
Pat: Lets read it!
Sponge: look! It says:
[   If you want Gary back you have to give me a Krabby Patty!
[         From, Plankton
[(PS. Hold the onions!)
Sponge: Oh No!
Pat: What is it?
Sponge: didn't you hear the note?
Pat: Oh yah!
Sponge: But where?
Pat: Maybe at the Chum Bucket!
Sponge: Well, let's go there!
::At the Chum Bucket::
Sponge: Give us Gary!!!
Pat: Yah!
::Kevin walks in (still spazzing out) and grab?s Gary::
Kevin: Ha Ha Ha Ha!!!!!  
Plankton: Well... This stinks!
Sponge: Do the honors!
Pat: I will!
::Pat beats up Plankton::
Sponge: Let's follow Kevin!
Patrick: OK!
:: They follow Kevin to a barn::
Kevin: Finaly! Vengeance!
Sponge: Not so fast Kevin!
Pat: What will you do!
Kevin: Actually... I'm not sure! Wait a second!
:: Runs outside::
Kevin: Now I will launch "Gary" on this catapult!
 Sponge: (Shriek)

Is it better than the last chapter?
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« Reply #7 on: December 05, 2003, 05:09:38 pm »
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Is it better than the last chapter?
Yes, it's better. For some reason the "hold the onions" part made me laugh.
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« Reply #8 on: December 05, 2003, 05:13:06 pm »
I didn't really find it funny. Ands why do you keep doing this?: "It?s Can?t." You put a question mark there...
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« Reply #9 on: December 05, 2003, 05:17:51 pm »
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I didn't really find it funny. Ands why do you keep doing this?: "It?s Can?t." You put a question mark there...
im writing it on Microsoft word and For some reasonwhen i convert it changes from ... or ' or " to ?
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« Reply #10 on: December 06, 2003, 03:57:56 pm »
Sorry for the double posting!
Chapter 3
The Catapult

Sponge: Oh No!
Pat: What should we do!?!
Kevin: Ha ha ha!
:: Kevin launches the catapult::
Sponge: No! Gary! Ohhh? You're going to get it Kevin!
Kevin: Huh?
Sponge: Aaahhhhhhhhhh!!!!
::Spongebob starts hitting Kevin so hard it hurts Spongebob's rist::
Kevin: Ugh!
Pat: that's what you deserve!!!
Spongebob: Call the mental hospital!
Pat: Well, Ok.
::Patrick calls the mental hospital::
Pat: Hello?
Secretary: Yes? What is it?
Pat: It's Patrick!
Sec.: Oh, the regular!
Pat: No, not me! I'm not crazy! There's a crazy man here and I'd like to report him!
Sec.: What's his name?
Pat: Spongebob.
Sec.: Ok we'll go pick him up! We'll be right there!
Pat: Thanks! That guy was really getting on my nerves!
::Pat hangs up::
Sponge: Do you know what you've just done you IDIOT!!!
Pat: What?
Sponge: You reported me to them!!!
Pat: Oh, sorry!
Sponge: Call them back right now!!!
Pat: Ok, Ok,
::Pat Calls::
Sec.: Hello?
Pat: Hello this is Pat! Umuh dadeedoodeedoo!
::Pat faints::
Sec.: Better get Pat and that Spongefred guy and throw both of them the mental hospital!
Sponge: Oh No!
::Meanwhile on the Flying Dutchman's ship::
Flying Dutchman: This is great tea!
::Gary fly's onto The Dutchman's from the catapult::
Flying Dutchman: Well what do we have here? A cute little snail.  The books say's that whom ever steps foot on my ship has to be part oh my crew forever!
Gary: Meow?
Flying Dutchman: That's right little buddy! FOREVER! Ha ha ha!
Gary: Meow!
Flying Dutchman: Oh Shut up!
:: Meanwhile on land ::
Sponge: Hi Mental Institution guys.
Mental Institution guy 1: Freeze! Before you do anything else loony!
Sponge (Thinking) What should I do?? I have an idea!
Sponge: There's Spongebob!
 ::Points at Kevin::
Mental Institution guy2: But what about Patrick!
Sponge: He also call's himself Patrick!
Mental Institution guy1: Thank you very much!
Kevin: What?
::They take Kevin to the Mental Instutution::
Sponge: Well that is solved!
Pat: But where is Gary?
Telegram Guy: Telegram for Mr. Squarepants!
Sponge: That's me!
Telegram Guy: Well here yah go!
Sponge: Let's read it! It say's:
[ Hello. I have your snail friend!
[ If you want him back?
[ You can't get him back!
[ To Bad!
[ From, The Flying Dutchman
[ (ps. Na-na-na-na-na I have the snail)
[ (pss. If you even try to sneak on my boat I will steal your soul!)
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« Reply #11 on: December 23, 2003, 10:13:27 am »
its really good, i like fanfics, but it takes me a long time to come up with a good ideah then writedown or type it
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« Reply #12 on: December 23, 2003, 05:21:32 pm »
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its really good, i like fanfics, but it takes me a long time to come up with a good ideah then writedown or type it
Stop bringing back old topics or I'll report you.
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« Reply #13 on: December 24, 2003, 06:48:35 am »
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its really good, i like fanfics, but it takes me a long time to come up with a good ideah then writedown or type it
Stop bringing back old topics or I'll report you.
He's right. you shouldnt.


I stoped writing it because nobody was reading it a long time ago.
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« Reply #14 on: December 24, 2003, 11:07:07 am »
i was just replying,i didnt no it was old, dang, u peeps are harsh
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Sometimes when I sleep at night I think of (Dr. Seuss's) 'Hop on Pop.'
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